you gave me a toothbrush and I promised I’d be back
it wasn’t a lie; I thought I might this time
but then I got my way
and he got in the way
and then time got away
and everything was gone and so was I
but you still check in now and then
to see if I’ll keep my promise
to hear some more of my silence
and you’ve never mentioned the toothbrush
but I wonder if it’s still there
I wonder if it’s still wet, still waiting
still dripping tiny beads of guilt, the drops
not big enough to hear from here
not loud enough, really, to make any sound at all
i love this
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Thank you! 😊
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Your welcome- I love your name freckles for breakfast- too thats so awesome
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Thanks so much!! ❤
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When I first had the idea for this blog, I was thinking that coming up with a name for it would take forever. But this one came to me almost instantly and it just stuck and I’ve never looked back 😆
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Right okay I get it but
who are you??
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Sometimes my past self (such as in this post), sometimes my current self, and sometimes my future self, depending on my mood 💁🏼😆
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But I want to talk to youuu
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Then talk to meee! ❤
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I guess if I write more there’ll be more opportunity to…
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Nice work with this poem.
Well done freckles.
Cheers,
Frank
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Thanks so much, Frank! I appreciate the encouragement 😀
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This is gorgeous.
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Aw, you’re making me blush! 😊😊😊
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Love the last stanza! You have such an endearing tone in your poetry. And I love your use of e.e. cummings’ style. Have a great day 🙂
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Thank you so much, Rob! Sometimes it’s a struggle between wanting to keep a certain rhythm and wanting to say what wants to be said. I actually had hesitations about the last stanza, but it wrote itself and didn’t want to be changed so I just let it be. I’m so glad you like it 😊
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generally l always need my rhythm. I know rhyming is out of favor, but every one of mine I think rhymes, save a few. Your voice is really nice throughout your poetry
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Yes, me too. Sometimes, for me, it’s a matter of choosing between a clean rhythm and a messier one. Like if you take out ‘the drops’ and take out ‘really’ then it flows much more nicely, but doesn’t have the same feel.
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And I must admit, I’ve never actually read e.e. cummings 😬 but perhaps I should look him up 😆 I hope you have a fantastic day as well! Your comment definitely brightened mine ❤
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MOSTLY used no punctuation lol http://www.best-poems.net/e_e_cummings/a_pretty_a_day.html
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Fascinating! I’d like to think I make more sense than that, though. He’s obviously in a class all his own, which I guess is what makes him so renowned.
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you certainly do
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So I guess that’s a good and a bad thing? xP
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nope, as keats said “beauty is truth, and truth is beauty.” Write on!
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Aw, I love that! What a great quote. Feel free to send me more whenever they apply, I’m woefully unknowledgeable when it comes to these things 🙂
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need not worry, you are speaking from your heart and life…all the knowledge you need 😉
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he wrote all his poetry in lower case and used no punctuation…chop off the very block lol
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Ah! Good to know! I have another blog that uses both capitalization and punctuation, so I suppose only my freckles persona takes after him 😆
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I’m sorry that I’ve clearly entered Stalker Mode, but the missing has come into full swing. I really love this one.
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I was under the impression you disliked this one…
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I think the tone of my original Ages Ago comment was misinterpreted. From what I can tell, I meant ‘who are you’ as in ‘how do you know me so well’.
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Ah, yes, I did not think that. I thought you were pointing out the unusual role reversal between me and my poem subject.
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I may have in the past also written a scene involving a toothbrush and regret–I’m fairly sure that parallel was calling out to me as bizarre. Typing that out, though, I see now how it could’ve been difficult to interpret.
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